The piano

 The Piano       

Make a copy, rename and start your writing on your copy.

Learn

Click on the url below and watch the short clip.

The Piano

Before you start writing

This video is about a man  who remembers his past and recalls his memories. Think about how he would be feeling and other memories that this might trigger.

Create  

WALT write a descriptive piece of writing from the old man’s point of view as he recalls his memories.

Success Criteria

We need to focus on these things

• Full stops, capital letters,
• Paragraphs
• We need to follow the sentence tools for our opening paragraphs.

Share

Once this is completed you can publish it on your personal blog.
WALT write a descriptive piece
of writing from the old man's
point of view as he re calls his memories.

                     

Hello there, I am a old wrinkly Woman, let’s start from the beginning. I was playing the piano upstairs when I heard my husband  yell out to me his name is Dom, ‘’DO THE DISHES!’’ Yelled Dom. I slowly walked down the stairs when all a sudden there was a banana. I didn’t see it so I rolled down the stairs, ‘’ DONK DONK!’’ my husband tried to run, be he couldn’t because he had a cramp.

‘’AHHHHH!’’ I yelled. 2 hours later, my wife was in hospital, I was sad. I waited  for weeks, then I heard the doctor say ‘’sorry Dom she’s gone’’. I got onto my knees and prayed, ‘’dear God hope you made my wife’s journey to heaven good’’ I stayed still for like a hour. I went home depressed and tried but instead of going to bed I went to play my wife’s piano.

As I was playing the piano I remembered all the things that happened in the past.  

When I first went on a holiday with my wife, we went to greece. There were lots of stuff there, and I remembered when I was in World War 2, I hid with my friend in the cold damp trenches.  The mud felt the old sticky slime.  that day  this BIG HUGE MAN!! Came out of nowhere and shot my friends head. The big man didn’t see me so I had good luck, but not my friend.

The dark juicy blood came out like a volcano. There was no point of saving him, so I got out of the trenches and started to shoot. But all a sudden I got shot in the leg, then my first birthday present when I was 5. I was a big fat chubby kid, I got a scooter horse. I tried to make it look like I loved it be really, I didn’t.

So for years I haven't even touched it, so I gave it to my grandson.  He didn’t like it by the looks so he came and played the piano with me. It was my time to go.

As it came towards me: tuhituhi

Week#45

World Events for your writing

I’m sure you won’t have missed the events in Barcelona, Spain this week or the devastation caused by the mud slide in Sierre Leone and the violence in Charlottesville, Virginia. The prompt this week uses the emotions that the media has shown us.

Latest prompt

As I said at the top of this page, the events around the world this week:

It was a typical Winter's day at school but since it was Friday it was the last day. All of us were tired, so my teacher decided to play Kahoot. As we were playing Kahoot I looked over to my left to see my friend frightened and pale. I don’t know why but he said ‘’I felt the ground shake.’’ I didn’t know what he was talking about but my stomach dropped. I saw mud running past the door, the mud came into the classroom. Me and my friend were holding hands, as it came rushing towards us we drowned.

100 word challenge

Week 4:

This is the new 100 word challenge

You will be working in your Tuakana/Tēina pair for this writing task. You will be collaborating to create an exciting piece of writing together.

Before you start:

Make a copy of the file and save it in your tuhituhi folder. Name it “T3 W4 - 100 word challenge ” (then your initials)   

Learn:

Here is the latest prompt:

Just what is the story behind this character’s laughter?

The form will close on 19th August at 23.45 BST

Create:

WALT: Create a descriptive piece of writing through the eyes of the main character

We need to focus on these things:

• Full stops and capital letters
• Using language features to make our writing more interesting

Share:

Once this is completed you can publish it on your personal blogs.

  

Hi I’m a seal I was going home and I had the most funniest day. I will start from the beginning, I was at school and my friend told me a joke it made me laugh so hard.He told me jokes he said “ what time did the man go to the dentist? tooth hurty” and I started laughing. after school I was going home I saw a man he was walking home his pant fell down I started to laugh. I saw a clown telling some jokes he told me the most funniest joke he said “ Coca Cola.   

Whale Fantasia

Whale Fantasia       

1. Make a copy, rename and start your writing on your copy. Save your file into your Tuhituhi folder.

Learn

2. Click on the url below and watch the short clip.

Whale Fantasia

Before you start writing:

You are writing from the viewpoint of one of the swimmers OR that you are one of the whales. Think about how you would describe the setting that you are in.

How are you going to create atmosphere in your writing?

What sort of language are you going to use to create tension and suspense and tell the reader that you are thinking and feeling?

Create  

WALT write a descriptive piece of writing through the eyes of someone who is dreaming that they are swimming with whales OR that they are a whale.

Success Criteria

We need to focus on these things:

• Full stops, capital letters
• Paragraphs

To start with you will write a description of the first scene, now describe what it is like as you move through the underwater landscape.

Use the show not tell technique to create thoughtful writing. You are writing through the eyes of somebody who is dreaming that they are swimming with whales. Create suspense and tension you swim through the water, it is as if you belong there.                              

Go to this Whale Fantasia PADLET  and start writing your ideas, words feelings adjectives, onomatopoeia,  similes and metaphors.

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Once this is completed you can publish it on your personal blog.

It was 6 o'clock in the morning and I haven’t slept all night because of this day. I quickly got my togs on and ran to the beach, the waves crashed into the shore like a tornado.

I didn’t want to go in the water so I just looked at the view. I stayed there from 6 o’clock until about 12 because the view was so beautiful I couldn't take my eyes off it. As I was walking to the water I could feel the seaweed  it was as slimy as spaghetti.

I dived into the water like a dolphin and the water was as cold as ice. The deeper I went the darker it was. As I  went deeper  I could see more sea animals. I saw swordfish with their noses as sharp as a knife.I saw electric eels that glowed like glowworms in a cave.

As I was swimming in the cold blue ocean I came upon three big whales, they were as big as a classroom. I felt like I was in a big fishing tank. After looking at the whales I swam up to the top of the water, then I decided to go home so I swam back to shore.

The sand was so hot as hot as an oven as it burnt my feet. I ran across the sand and got an ice cream. Then all of a sudden I woke up in my bed,looked around and I realised that the whole thing was a dream.

Dream Giver

The Dream Giver

WALT use adjectives and similes in our writing.

We know we have done this when:

• We have painted a picture with our words.
• Made the reader want to read on.
• Used more than 4 similes.
• Used lots of adjectives to make our writing more interesting.

Extra things that we need to keep an eye on…..

Punctuation.

Capital letters and full stops.

Click on the URL below and rewatch the Dream Giver short clip.

You can rewind and stop and start as much as you need to. This will help you when you need to describe the Dream Giver.

The Dream Giver

Go onto the padlet and brainstorm some ideas to help you. Padlet

Start your writing here.

I am the Dream Giver. I get up every night and brush my YUCK, BROWN TEETH!!!. Then I have a shower and wash my long, thick, hairy legs. My house is old, older than the oldest man in the world. I wash my holy shiny wings and set off. The first place I had to go was a dark old Orphanage. I went to open the old, white, door. It made a sound like it was going to break. I walk slower than a sloth.

I gave the kids dream’s then I ended up with one more kid. It looked like he was reading Grim Reaper’s Final Kill. I did not want to wake the boy up. So I left two eggs on his warm, white, bed.  

Then I quietly tiptoed out the old white door but the boy turned his head and broke one of the eggs into Grim Reaper’s Final Kill. I stopped in fear, his dream was now a nightmare. In his nightmare he was in a dark forest. Then he started to walk. The trees were old and covered with webs and little scary bugs. The boy heard a whisper behind him his eye were bulging and he started to cry. But the boy just walked and walked until there was a big rock. It was as big as an elephant,.

There were dead people and dry blood on the rock. There was an old sign that said “you're next”  The boy ran as fast as he could.

Then he stopped and had a rest, but when he went to sit on a rock he heard a loud BANG!!!. He did not move, he was as still as a crocodile trying to eat you. But then the Grim Reaper was behind him. As he just stayed there, the Grim Reaper went to cut his head off with his sharp shiny bald.

But I came and saved the day. The boy had a big grin on his face the I turned  the Grim Reaper into an old mossy statue. The boy said “thanks”  I said  “now go back to sleep”. He started to get tired and started to sleep.

I flew fast as a tiger, then the little boy woke up from his dream I flew straight out that white old door. The boy saw my shadow, his eyes were shocked that he saw me. But he did not care he just READ THAT BOOK!!. Now the boy is going to have another nightmare. I did that whole thing for nothing. I was as angry as raging bull.